My Poem-Empty promise(is it good?)?

Question

Another random poems except without the weird gey stuff.Is it good?



 I hate you so damn much
It makes me want to cry.
How selfish can you be?
deceitful so much lies...


You stripped me of my happiness
You robbed me of my joy
My heart is entirely broken
deeply wishing it was yours


I mourn because I miss you
I pout because I cared
but no more does it matter
the life we could have shared


Don't think to come back
its best you stay away
because if I ever see you
your life will end that day


I can say now without concern
that we will never be
together in undying love.
In peaceful harmony.

Christy B · Accepted Answer

it is a wonderful poem great job!!!!

shirleyf · Answer

Well, it was going along good until your fourth stanza.  It sounds like you would murder her if she comes back.  Not exactly a practical solution.  Otherwise, a pretty good effort.  

peace, shirley

My Poem-Empty promise(is it good?)?

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