My Life Will End...my poem comment plz....?

This poem has to be read a certain way.What i mean is that its like a sort of rap almost.It can be read and sang.Which ever u prefer but i wrote it to be sang though but everyone has a different way of reading so read it and comment what you think.Don't really care if its bad feed back or not...oh and its not done but i had to end it somewhere so i did.Oh another thing....im not a good writer, i just wanted to try it

I never thought that id reach this peak

where my life don't matter and it'll end this week

I've tried so hard but the world don't see

my efforts sifted..to the lowest degree.

I'll end my life with this blade in hand

cut myself up,just like i planned

I don't give a f^ck and don't give a damn

F^ck my family and f^ck my friends

I was nice enough to care for all

but i walked myself into a wall

needed help but no one around

everyone left me nailed to the ground

ill end my life with rope, tied to my neck

blood stain floor yeah it be a mess

a sight it'll be for the first person to check

where the hell is he?

ha it'll be a wreck?

i cry some more as i reminisce

about stupid **** like the first girl I've kissed

hanging out chilling that was bliss.

Look at me now Im about to do this sh^t?

I'll end my life up here so high

let myself fall and close my eyes

feel the air creep and caress my thighs

3 seconds left everything will be alright

I was good to her but she still played me

took my heart and took my baby

maxed my cards out on a shopping spree

took the car and the family big screen.

I'll end my life hopefully in my sleep

took a whole bottle of pills and they weren't cheap

Let my heart race at an increasing speed

foaming out of my mouth oh my I've begun to O.D

I never thought that i would reach this peak

where my life don't matter it'll end this week

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