Is my poem "Peace at Last," too honest to read at a Funeral?

Question

Peace at last


Peace at last
All is calm and still
No more clamour of life
No shouting for your pills

No insistent demand for bed pans
Or complaints about the food
Of all the patients in "Sunnyglades"
They voted you most rude.

Clinging to life like a limpet
The years went on and on
A thousand dollars a week
Till our inheritance was gone

So seeing you cold in your coffin
I just want you to know.
How sad I am you died last week
Instead of twenty years ago

Yasmine · Accepted Answer

That is too honest. People would think you're disrespectful although I'd probably write a poem like this too.

Happy Hiram · Answer

If others do not feel remotely the same, it will come across as sour grapes (or inheritance greed) instead of honesty.

I rather like it, although I suspect it isn't "honest" but "spiteful" as well.

alan P · Answer

Way too honest.

Is my poem "Peace at Last," too honest to read at a Funeral?

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