Do you like my Kingshill poem?

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Kingshill Cirencester by Al Sepert

The scene it was perfection,
viewed from above the road
from the beauteous green bridge
that dual carriageway bestrode

The houses honeyed bradstone
in cotswold hues displayed
there upon the hillside
full three floors high arrayed

Arrayed about so finely
that bare an inch were spared
in yellowed uniformity
with red brick here and there.

The charm of it overwhelming
the artistry sublime.
t'was like the streets of London
in Charlie Dickens time


I saw it in my minds eye
Ye Olde Curiosity Shoppe
Oliver Twist, Christmas Carol
'tis too much I'll have to stop.

Al Sepert 2012

Free Advice UK · Accepted Answer

Dear Al Sepert,

I think you have written a wonderful poem. I like how you have gone into depth about the scenery and what it was like. Sounds a lot like Dicken's time to me. Keep up the good work. 

Many Thanks,

George Beaver

Lapiz Dominoes. · Answer

Being a seasoned classicist  now,I find this very charming -
reading of a romanticised London in the Cotswolds is a treat
and a successful minor poetic feat!
The visuals are both strong and subtle -
 Take a flourishing bow!


***Stanza 1.Line 3., You might describe HOW the bridge is `beauteous` perhaps?
..........................Or alter the wording oh, just very, very slightly?  A poem should not
..........................over-stretch the flow of your readers` credulity, nor overwork the mind.***

Otherwise it`s most engaging and refreshing and metrically sound. 
xxx Oyez.:)
:)

Do you like my Kingshill poem?

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