Collaboration lyrics for your perusal?

interesting, for sure. When I read lyrics, I like to feel the rhythm of the verses work together, like reading a poem. If they don't do that, it's awkward. Also, I want the words to make sense so I don't have to stop and try to understand what they mean (Dylan)..... Example: first verse, second line I would be more comfortable with (something like) "destination unknown". It fits better (for me) and I can get a picture of this actually happening and relate better to it. (though I CAN see the meaning that nobody that knows writer could condone that he had been traveling this road) But since I don't know the writer, I couldn't say either way if he had or had not been traveling it. (?)

the second verse sounds like you are an occupier.......and that turns me off some.

Third verse: 1st line needs more syllables to feel right with the second line (random, left outcast)

Third verse: I think the third and fourth line should be reversed.....fits better (for me)

I like the fourth verse. It all fits pretty good and makes sense. (just me talkin')