Do you like my Poem "The Protest"?

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The protest by Al Sepert

Standing in the falling rain
wondering if we are quite insane
as soaked right through to the skin
We wait for the protest to begin

Lynden Stow is far away
up in Distant Willersley
He probably will send a spy
or read about us in Private eye

David Fowles won't show hs face
he'll be warm and dry some place
And you can bet that Carole and Sue
Won't be frozen like me and you.

Burgess, Parsons, Gibbs and Dare 
the rest of the Cabinet they don't care
That we are freezing to protest
the unfair charges they've just set 

I won't be paying the parking hike
If I go to Ciren I'll ride my bike
Or peraps I'll tke the Porsche and go
and park in the Forum or Kingsmead Tesco

I dont know why we protest at all
we probably won't achieve sod all
Far better to stay in the warm at home
and do something useful or write a poem

Its aboutb the Cotswold Liberal Democrats car parking charge protest at Cirencester England on 8th January 2012

Caz :) x · Accepted Answer

Who ever you are I have no idea why I'm included in your poetry ? LOL 
Anyway whats it all about Alfi,you just crack me up you just bombarded me with empty poetry .
So I ant to know who you are and what you mean by this poem I'm no very good at deciphering poetry ... But you probably no that , Smiles to you :)

Norris Green · Answer

Well Al Serpert a politically driven poem with contemporary issues is absolutely something I appreciate, as a subject its possibly not everyone's cup of tea so to speak but it certainly gets my vote because I enjoy reading "gritty" works. A word of warning though if I may, be careful when referring to actual living persons and trading locations as these references may be interpreted as infringing rules set up by Y.A, particularly if / when someone complains (and they do as I found out to my annoyance a while ago now) .

A great, meaningful and very appropriate poem written with a thread of irony woven in which I don't interpret at all as rant, possibly not totally metered timing but then does that matter, I don't think so, then I write with abstract referencing too and that is more than often picked up on by people who have set ideals. Thanks for sharing... lets have a follow up one please in this ongoing saga.

Pip pip for now.

Anonym · Answer

I like it. Try not to be so specific with names. use your metaphors to your advantage. make you readers think. force them to understand it will make them re read until they get it which is what you want. keep them entertained and guessing at the same time.
Keep Up The Good Work!

Do you like my Poem "The Protest"?

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