need some quick feedback on a poem?

Use your own words every chance you get. I think you say it better for what you have in mind.It's short and very much to the point. You should probably write more often if writing is not too extremely painful for you.

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"My soul lives to be scorched

My body aches to be burned"

I didn't like it all that much. The rest is good, but just those lines. I mean my body aches to be burned? Mabye if you put some meaning behind that.

"i am like a phoenix

reduced to ash and reborn to soar"

Nice, keep it exactly how it is.

its alright, not terrible but i would make it a bit better because its about fire

damn that was deep

mabi you need a little more mete4s (metefore's)<------idk how to spell that

perhaps if you give it some rhyme?