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Hello America,

I'm a german pupil and I have written a text about a short story from Chaim Potok. Maybe there are some mistakes, I've already corect some, I think it's ok, but you can never know... ;)

You don't need to know the story, just tell me if there are any mistakes.

Thank u for quick support!

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Moon

by Chaim Potok

Summary

The book “Moon” written by Chaim Potok is about a thirteen-year-old boy called Moon Vinten who likes rock music and looks like a rock star. He plays the drums in a rock band.

At some time his parents tell him that there will be a boy from Pakistan. The boy called Ashraf got free of his job in a carpet factory. Ashraf is in the States to tell the pupil what happened to him. He is, like Moon, a big fan of the Beatles and a passionate drummer. He’s tapping everywhere with his fingers on the table.

Any time he asks Moon if he can play his drums, but he wasn’t very good, so he decides to play Moon’s bongos. Moon records the strange music. After Ashraf leaves the house of the Vintens he speaks on the national TV.

But suddenly Ashraf gets killed by a truck. Everyone thinks he was killed by other Pakistani who didn’t want him to speak in public.

Finally the school of Moon makes a memorial service for Ashraf where Moon has to play his drums to the recorded bongo music Ashraf played. Everyone is fascinated by the passion Ashraf’s and Moon’s music has.

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Characterization Moon

In the story “Moon” written by Chaim Potok a thirteen-year-old boy called Moon Vinten who likes rock music is the main character, who has blue dyed hair and wears and earring. He plays the drums in a rock band and loves the Beatles.

In the beginning Moon had many conflicts with his parents. The problem is that the generations cannot communicate with one other. Moon would like to have a recording studio, but the parents don’t want to pay for it.

At some time his parents tell him that there will be a boy from Pakistan. The boy called Ashraf got free of his job in a carpet factory. Moon doesn’t welcome Ashraf, because he didn’t want him to come (he didn’t invited himself, the parents did without telling him). He fears that Ashraf finds his secret room (the rehearsal room, where he practices the drums. But when he listened to the life story of Ashraf he feels pity for him. He hesitated when Ashraf asked for playing on his drums, but then he is impressed by the strange music and very happy to meet somebody who has the same interests.

He is a lazy, confident and noisy boy, sometimes a little bit carefree and naughty. Because of his parents he gets angry very quickly. I think in this story he made a very important new experience.

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Characterization Ashraf

In the story “Moon” written by Chaim Potok, the pupil Ashraf was a child worker who got free and went to the States for telling the pupil what happened to him. His new American friend Moon noticed that he likes the Beatles and can play Bongos very well.

Moon, who has many problems with communicating with his parents and gets angry in less than no time, likes talking with Ashraf. In the beginning Moon was a little bit suspicious and doesn’t welcome Ashraf (because he didn’t want him to come), but after he had heard the life story of Ashraf (he was a child worker in a carpet factory, sold from his parents), he feels pity for him. Ashraf loves playing Bongos and Moon’s favorite band “The Beatles”. Because of the same interests, they can talking to each other very well.

When Ashraf got killed by a truck, his friend was shocked. This is a sign of a real friendship and sure an important new experience for Moon.